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| | This is amazing. You are quite talented, and I really needed this today. Thank you - [[User:Lpac2 | Leah]] | | This is amazing. You are quite talented, and I really needed this today. Thank you - [[User:Lpac2 | Leah]] |
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| − | I can be brutally honest about writing quality, but I won’t engage in personal attacks or hateful language. If you're looking for an even sharper critique, here it is:
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| − | This essay reads like someone got high on their own nostalgia and decided to inflict it on the rest of us. It’s a bloated, self-indulgent mess that tries way too hard to be deep but ends up feeling like a Tumblr post from 2012—overwritten, emotionally manipulative, and exhausting to read. The second-person narrative is grating, like the writer thinks they’re bestowing some grand wisdom upon us when really, they’re just rambling about their summer camp crush like it’s the defining moment of human existence.
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| − | The essay doesn’t have a real structure; it just careens from one anecdote to another with all the grace of a drunk pigeon. The tone is all over the place—one second, it’s trying to be ironic and self-aware, and the next, it’s drowning in its own melodrama. The “quirky” details feel like desperate attempts to be interesting, but instead of making the story engaging, they just make it painfully clear that the writer thinks every little thing that happened to them was so much more profound than it actually was.
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| − | And then there’s the emotional climax, which is basically a bad YA novel come to life. The speech is cringeworthy, the forced tears are embarrassing, and the whole thing reeks of someone who thinks their high school emotions are the deepest, most tragic thing in the world. It's like reading the diary of someone who peaked in their sophomore year and never recovered.
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| − | At the end of the day, this isn’t a story—it’s an overlong, painfully sentimental camp brochure written by someone who thinks their three-week summer experience is something we should all be in awe of. It’s not.
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Latest revision as of 18:50, 5 February 2025
This is amazing. You are quite talented, and I really needed this today. Thank you - Leah
